Drift Away (feedback)

would really appreciate some feedback on this verse please... for a track im recording in London soon... aint written to this type of music for a while now though... not sure about this verse...

Im in my grimy office... dressed in a suit and a tie (fall on the 5)
Day dreaming of the rap game and a beautiful life (fall on the 5)
I work with low life 9 to 5 slaves
I don’t wanna be them, Id rather lie in my grave
Now I don't do it to fund a habit cos the yayo kills
But I can't sit waiting for magic, I gotta pay those bills
as I'm sat at my desk with my company’s badge on my chest
I feel vexed cos I work with all these talentless wrecks,
Death,(Pause) I see it as I'm staring at the ceiling
no believing in this life so I start dreaming
Switch off, drift off to a better place
Live on stage with Meagan Fox checking out my serenade
And gettin paid, for that which I'm passionate about
Reading articles about me - the best rapper in the crowd
But as I open my eyes and they return to focus
I puke on my desk realising what I yearn fors hopeless

oh, ignore the shit in brackets

Shits nice, im feeling it, nice little twist at the end too.

Flows kool, vocabs kool, overall nice piece.

cool... safe for taking the time to read, etc.

any more feedback?

its got some nice emotion to it - not overly complicated - could be a nice track